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Offline eagles12

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Is My Ad Okay?
« on: May 29, 2010, 02:07:18 AM »
Here's an ad I am considering running for my site http://www.my6figureincome.info:

"You Can Potentially Earn Over $400,000.00 In Less Than 19 Days!

How?  Simply join http://www.my6figureincome.info by investing only $6.00.  You will receive a unique referral id.  All you have to do is promote it.  If you were to double your downline everyday, you would earn more than $400,000.00 in less than 19 days.  The key is in motivating your downline!

Why would anyone want to join?  By joining http://www.my6figureincome.info you have access to over $10,000.00 worth of software products (over 500 products) that come with resell rights that you can personally use and also sell, easily earning back the $6.00 you invested.

Will you help me?  Yes, I will!  I will provide you with the necessary banners, email templates, forum signatures, and etc. that you need to promote your referral id.

When can I start?  You can start now by visiting http://www.my6figureincome.info/join.php and completing the form!"

Would love to have you share your thoughts on this ad!

God bless,
Mark
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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #1 on: May 29, 2010, 04:13:18 AM »
Hi Mark

You want to get to the Philippines rapidly.... excellent work rate.

A word that is supposed to work is 'discover' , as in Discover how....

Cannot give you too much more advice but I'm sure you are not to far off the mark.

Jim

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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #2 on: May 29, 2010, 04:25:02 AM »
Hi Mark

You want to get to the Philippines rapidly.... excellent work rate.

A word that is supposed to work is 'discover' , as in Discover how....

Cannot give you too much more advice but I'm sure you are not to far off the mark.

Jim

Thanks, Jim...I will be sure to include the word "Discover" in the headline before submitting the ad!

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Mark
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P.S. Yes, I certainly do want to get to the Philippines really bad.  So far I have done a lot of work, but nothing to show for it.

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« Reply #3 on: May 29, 2010, 05:49:21 AM »
Hi Mark

The only problem I have with this ad is its credibility - $400,000 in 19 days? It seems that it's a return to the bad good old days of 'Instant Internet Riches'.

Perhaps a road to take would be the 'investment' angle (simply because 'investing' seems to be quite a hot topic right now).

How about these as possible titles:

"Discover how to turn a micro-investment into a massive return" (ensure that the 'micro' word and the 'massive' word are in different sized fonts)
"Fill Your 401K In A Month"
"Micro Investment Funds Massive Return - Discover How!"
"Bust Your Broker - Discover The 'New' Route To Massive Returns"

Also you have answered the 'What's in it for me' angle well but I would reinforce it this way:

""You Can Potentially Earn Over $400,000.00 In Less Than 19 Days!

How do I do it?:  Simply join http://www.my6figureincome.info by investing only $6.00.  You will receive a unique referral id.  All you have to do is promote it.  If you were to double your downline everyday, you would earn more than $400,000.00 in less than 19 days.  The key is in motivating your downline!

Why would I want to join?  By joining http://www.my6figureincome.info you have access to over $10,000.00 worth of software products (over 500 products) that come with resell rights that you can personally use and also sell, easily earning back the $6.00 you invested.

Will I be helped?  Yes, you will!  You will provide you with the necessary banners, email templates, forum signatures, and etc. that you need to promote your referral id.

When can I start?  You can start now by visiting http://www.my6figureincome.info/join.php and completing the form!""

Basically insert the word 'I' into your 'readers' questions' at the beginning (bolded for effect rather than publishing)


Now, all you have to figure out is where to publish the ad!

Good luck Mark - The mission is closer than you think.

Cheers

Val


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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #4 on: May 29, 2010, 06:19:13 AM »
Hi Mark

The only problem I have with this ad is its credibility - $400,000 in 19 days? It seems that it's a return to the bad good old days of 'Instant Internet Riches'.

Perhaps a road to take would be the 'investment' angle (simply because 'investing' seems to be quite a hot topic right now).

How about these as possible titles:

"Discover how to turn a micro-investment into a massive return" (ensure that the 'micro' word and the 'massive' word are in different sized fonts)
"Fill Your 401K In A Month"
"Micro Investment Funds Massive Return - Discover How!"
"Bust Your Broker - Discover The 'New' Route To Massive Returns"

Also you have answered the 'What's in it for me' angle well but I would reinforce it this way:

""You Can Potentially Earn Over $400,000.00 In Less Than 19 Days!

How do I do it?:  Simply join http://www.my6figureincome.info by investing only $6.00.  You will receive a unique referral id.  All you have to do is promote it.  If you were to double your downline everyday, you would earn more than $400,000.00 in less than 19 days.  The key is in motivating your downline!

Why would I want to join?  By joining http://www.my6figureincome.info you have access to over $10,000.00 worth of software products (over 500 products) that come with resell rights that you can personally use and also sell, easily earning back the $6.00 you invested.

Will I be helped?  Yes, you will!  You will provide you with the necessary banners, email templates, forum signatures, and etc. that you need to promote your referral id.

When can I start?  You can start now by visiting http://www.my6figureincome.info/join.php and completing the form!""

Basically insert the word 'I' into your 'readers' questions' at the beginning (bolded for effect rather than publishing)


Now, all you have to figure out is where to publish the ad!

Good luck Mark - The mission is closer than you think.

Cheers

Val



Thanks, Dom!  I appreciate the valuable feedback!

God bless,
Mark
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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #5 on: May 29, 2010, 09:17:13 PM »
I like the way it is worded and sounds really good.  However, I have to agree that you need to find a different tactic than using the $400,000 line.  People will read that and immediately think you are full of crap.  I know you qualified it by saying "the potential", but that really doesn't matter.  People reading that will only see "...earn...$400,000...19 days..." and stop reading and move on.

Not to mention the FTC is cracking down on outrageous claims these days.  Granted you are still a small fish and won't likely attract their attention, but you should still be careful.

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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #6 on: May 30, 2010, 12:10:18 AM »
I like the way it is worded and sounds really good.  However, I have to agree that you need to find a different tactic than using the $400,000 line.  People will read that and immediately think you are full of crap.  I know you qualified it by saying "the potential", but that really doesn't matter.  People reading that will only see "...earn...$400,000...19 days..." and stop reading and move on.

Not to mention the FTC is cracking down on outrageous claims these days.  Granted you are still a small fish and won't likely attract their attention, but you should still be careful.

Thanks, Sean, for the feedback...Ok, so maybe I need to word it another way.  But I have done the math and I know that 219 is equal to 524,2888.  So let me challenge you all...how would you word it?   I am leaning towards one of Dom's lines such as Micro investment Funds,Maximum Return-Discover How!

God bless, and to all those in the U.S.,
Have a Safe Memorial Day Weekend,
Mark
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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #7 on: June 20, 2010, 01:20:41 PM »
Mark,

I'm with everyone else here. What have YOU done in the last 19 days? If you follow the directions that you're given by SFI and turn it into a case study, then you could even use the case study as a bonus.

John

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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #8 on: June 20, 2010, 04:23:18 PM »
Mark,

I'm with everyone else here. What have YOU done in the last 19 days? If you follow the directions that you're given by SFI and turn it into a case study, then you could even use the case study as a bonus.

John

Good idea, if i can ever find the time...I am working one full time job and a part time job.  Plus, I put two web sites together this past week in what little spare time I have.  The things that I really want to do are on a back-burner because they take more time, which I don't have.

God bless,
Mark
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Re: Is My Ad Okay?
« Reply #9 on: June 24, 2010, 04:38:53 PM »
God Bless Ya' Mark ... you're a great guy but I'm with Dom! Anytime I see claims like that I roll my eyes! Also, I dabbled in SFI many years ago and just couldn't get it but that's the way I am with MLM.

On the upside ... Dom's suggested titles would have made me at least pause on the delete button.

John has a GREAT point as well. If YOU can do that in 19 days (or 30 or 60 for that matter) then you can attest to the validity of the program. SFI has been around too long to be totally discounted BUT how many will "click" with it. Will/Have YOU????